Oi vey!

[pecunium]

So, matociquala has a feature, wherein she informs us of the words Word didn't know.

I have long ago given up on the grammar checker in Word being able to keep track of subject/verb relationships when an intermediate phrase intrudes, but today I got one I just had to share. I was roughing out some text, and wrote the following (clunky) sentence.

One of my film bodies is an FE2, which has no mirror lock-up, but when I activate the self-timer the first thing to happen is the mirror flips up.

It needs some work, mostly in the last half. Word agreed with that assessement, kindly offering up this version instead.

One of my film bodies is an FE2, which has no mirror lock-up, but when I activate the self-timer the first thing to happen be the mirror flips up.

Right now, I'm tending toward something like this:

One of my film bodies is an FE2, which has no mirror lock-up, but the first thing to happen when I activate the self-timer is the mirror flipping up.

Comments

[waterlilly.livejournal.com]

I agree. It would help those of us whose cameras are of the "point it and shoot it" variety to understand what the action here is and why it's a problem.

I would also suggest breaking this into two sentences for clarity.

[antonia-tiger.livejournal.com]

The flipping up of the mirror causes vibration, which can be a bad thing. Whne you use the self-timer the vibration has time to die away.

[pecunium.livejournal.com]

The point isn't the content of the sentence (it's part of a couple thousand words about issues relating to magnification and the difficulties it poses the photographer.

The point I was making is the verb choice Microsoft is asking me to make.

If I used the pattern they are suggesting, the previous sentence would be recast as, "The point I was making is the verb choice Microsoft be asking me to make."